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Ideals are like the stars—we never reach them, but like mariners, we chart our course by them.

English Pictures and I

English Pictures is my best friend.

Three years ago, when I just became a high school student, I found that my knowledge of English was too limited. I also found it very difficult to learn English well. Though I worked hard, I failed. I read a lot of English materials and many reference books outside class, in the hope of improving my English in this way. But it didn t help. I was discouraged and almost wanted to give up.

One day, I found some copies of the magazine English Pictures in the school library by chance. I borrowed them and read them immediately. They had so many interesting stories, so many pictures in English and so many excellent exercises that I didn t want to put them down. From then on, I always borrowed it from the school library. When I read it, I find English easier to learn, and the more I read it, the easier it becomes.

English Pictures has been my best friends. I have been its reader for 4 years. During these years, I ve learnt a lot of grammar, how to use some useful verbs, how to make sentences correctly and how to read texts faster and understand them better. Moreover, I ve also learnt about many strange and interesting things in and outside China, such as the childhood of Abraham Lincoln, how Mother Meng taught her son Meng Zi and so on.

English Pictures can not only widen our knowledge of English, enrich our common sense and enlarge our vocabulary, but also give us courage and pleasure.

Since I made friends with English Pictures, I have become more and more interested in English. One of my English teachers once said, “You should not miss English materials that you can get outside the classroom.”So in my spare time, I always read English Pictures, A School Friend of English and other English materials.

Among these, I like English Pictures best.

本文语言流畅,结构严谨,语法比较规范,成功地描述了《英语画刊》给作者带来的帮助。

My Baby Cat

I have an eightmonthold baby cat named Snowman. His hair is as white as snow, with a little patch of black on his head. When he opens his eyes which are like blue lakes, you will find him beautiful and intelligent.

Snowman is fond of eating and sleeping in the sun. Several days ago, I bought a bag of cat food as his dessert. From then on, he waited at the cupboard for it every morning.

Snowman is so timid that he dares not go far away from home. One day, I took him out. He pressed himself close to me and seemed scared to death. As soon as he heard some people speaking not far away, I could feel him trembling all over.

Snowman is naughty and clever. He is interested in the hen downstairs. He often sits on the windows sill, enjoying the sunshine and the winter scene outside. His eyes seem to be closed, but in fact, he is staring at the hen. One day, not satisfied with only watching her, he could not help but jump down into the little yard in which the hen always had a walk in the morning. He ran after the hen, but did not catch her, because I stopped him and scolded him.

When he was two months old, my cousin caught a fish for him. It was the first time for him to see fish alive. He stared at it in silence. After a while, Snowman streched one of his paws toward the fish bowl. He tried to take the fish out, but failed. He sat down next to the fish bowl and thought of a way. He began to drink the water in the fish bowl. At last he drank up the water and turned over the fish bowl. The fish jumped out. Snowman was very excited and happy. He did not eat it but played with it.

Such is my baby cat Snowman, with a pink nose, paws that look like snowballs and practical jokes in his brain. Do you feel deeply attached to him as I do?

作者饱含情趣的笔触使一只可爱的小猫“Snowman”的形象跃然纸上。字里行间可以体会出作者对这只小猫的深厚感情。作者在与“Snowman”相处的日子里,对它作了细致观察,因而写起来具体、形象、生动、逼真,将“Snowman”的特点表现得淋漓尽致。

Road and Friend

There is a road which leads to my village. It isn t too long or too wide, but it is very important for me. I have walked along it for 9 years with a special friend.

He is my uncle s son. We grew up together. I m two months older than him, but he is much taller. One day 9 years ago, we were sent along this road to a school by father. But no one knew then what would happen between us.

Together, we went down the road to school and then back home. Together, we played, ran, rode our bikes, even when it rained or was windy. Day after day, year after year, on the road a great friendship was built between us, very beautiful and clean.

But what wasn t all, there was another side to it. During those years, we were not only friends, brothers and classmates, but also competitors.

In school, we always did well in examinations. However, most of the time, his result was better.

When we rode on the road again, I felt his wheels turned more quickly than mine. In fact, they were the same. I became sad and angry. In my heart, I yelled at myself, “Why are you always a failure?”No!I wouldn t be slower than him. I would beat him, but I needed to work hard...

The sun is always brighter after the rain. I got better results in exams. Although I didn t beat my competitor, I beat myself and made great progress.

When we were on the road again, I rode faster and faster. I didn t believe I would be a failure forever.

In fact, I must thank him. If not for him, I don t think I could have had so much faith in myself or won such good results.

9years ago, along that road, there were only a few small trees;today they have grown taller and stronger. In the shade of these, we finally parted for different schools. I m sad. But our competition hasn t stopped, he will be my competitor forever.

The road belongs to both of us, but it gets longer and longer, and our wheels will go faster and faster.

本文内容丰富,语言流畅,表达符合英语的习惯用法。比喻手法的运用也是本文的成功之处。

Growth Rings

I like surveying tree rings. The rings, large or small, clear or vague, record the life of a tree. Sometimes, I think not only the trees but also all the people in the world, have rings of their own. They re carving their own rings.

Of course, I have rings of my own. They are growing and changing all the time.

If you look at the rings very carefully, you ll find that the first rings aren t very clear. They represent my childhood. It was a time which was full of laughter and happiness, and without any worries. Because of this, the rings seem to be a little vague.

——They indicate naivety.

As I grew up day by day, I became a pupil in primary school, and then a middle school student. During that time, I changed a lot. I knew I was no longer a little girl, I liked to see the world with my own eyes. I learnt knowledge eagerly. I was trying my best to perfect myself. School life also made me more sensible. I remember one day, I had a quarrel with a classmate of mine. At first, I got very angry. But then, when I knew that I had also made some mistakes, I said sorry to her bravely. So I think the rings of that period became clearer and clearer.

——They indicate growth.

Later, I entered senior middle school. Life became so different that I couldn t fit at first. So, I wasn t so happy as before. I know I m a senior school student now. Even though studying is very hard, I still have confidence. I m trying my best to get along with my friends. I mustn t be angry at little things. I ve learnt to pardon. I will continue to go forward.

——It shows I ve grown up.

Now, I realize that life can t be smooth all the time. You must face either success of failure. It s a long process. From naivety to youth, to grownup, everything will be recorded like the rings of a tree.

So let s cheer up and go on struggling to make our rings better and better.

本文作者通过对“年轮”的观察,以“年轮”比喻、衬托、反映了孩童的无忧无虑,少年对世界的探索和对知识的渴望,以及自己青春期的困惑,最后重新找到努力的方向,表达了本文的主题。文章立意新颖,层次清楚,过渡自然,尽管原文在用词和表达方式上尚有欠缺之处,但语言还较流畅。如能对未来设想再作一点具体描述,呼应开头,全文结构将会更加完整。此外作者也还需掌握更多词汇,以文章最后一句“...to make our rings better and better”为例,如将它改成“to make our rings more and more mature”, 不是与“年轮”的主题更贴切吗?

Going Home

Every day, when all the lessons are over, you can see everybody in the classroom laughing and talking freely. That may be the happiest time of the day. Why?Because it is time to go home.

Home does not only mean the house you live in, it also embodies your happiness, your sadness, your childhood and your growth. At home you can do anything you like. You needn t worry about what others think of your behavior. Play pingpong if you like, wear strange clothes if you like, write some poems if you like, sing loudly if you like, sit on the floor watching TV if you like, because it is YOUR home.

Your home may not be pretty, but it must be lovely. Your home may not be modern, but it must be comfortable. So you can see, if you are a small boat, home is your harbor.

Every afternoon when I am on my way home, I always think about something exciting. For example, a great meal, delicious steaks, fried chicken, potato chips, a cup of coffee and so on. Every night at home, after a comfortable bath, I d lie in the sofa with a cup of black coffee in my hand, and talk with my parents. I really enjoy the warm feeling very much!

Last summer, I went to my aunt s for holiday. She lived by the seaside. Though the sea was quite magnificent, I couldn t enjoy myself. I didn t eat enough, because there wasn t the wonderful steak cooked by my mother. I couldn t get to sleep easily, because my toy bear was not in my arms. All in all, I missed my mother, my father, my piano, my flute, my toy bear, my Mickey Mouse, my beautiful flowers, my bed, my shoes. I missed my home!

On Sundays, when I open my eyes in the morning, I can see the sun shining on the pillow, turning it into a golden handkerchief. Then I get up, have breakfast, and do some exercises. Reading is my favorite pastime, so I usually spend whole morning on it. In fact, I think that everything I do at home is exciting and joyful.

In my memory, Mommy is always smiling. She always told me, “Smile at everybody, then everybody, including yourself, will feel warm.”She loves me, and gives me a home full of love. I think that if one day I become a young mother of a little girl, I will also make a warm home for her with my love, just like my mother has done for me.

Everybody loves their parents, and everybody loves their home. No matter how far away one is from his home, he will go back in the end. There is a good proverb, “Gold house, silver house, none can compare with my own house”. It s quite true.

家是每个人避风的港湾,是用饱含爱的一砖一瓦建造起来的城堡。正如作者所说,在家里你可以随便做些什么,只要你愿意。喝上一杯浓咖啡,同家人聊聊天,家带给我们的永远是无限温馨的感受,无论我们身在何方,家永远是我们心灵的寄托。作者文字流畅,英语运用得比较自如,善用排比句加强语气。但要注意用得多了难免单调。

A Beautiful Rose

I planted a rose in front of my house last November. I was eager to see it bloom so I watered it almost every day. The rose grew quickly.

Spring has come. The rose plant is has grown much taller. Many green leaves have come out together with some buds. One Sunday morning while I was watering the plant, I was surprised to see a red rose blooming. It seemed as if it were a beautiful shy girl selflessly giving out fragrance, with which I was intoxicated. “Oh, that is great!”I cried out to my brother. “Come to see what is happening.”He ran up to me. “How nice it is!”he said, “I can hardly believe my eyes!”

In the afternoon when I returned home after visiting a friend. I went to see the rose again. To my astonishment, the beautiful flower was not there. Tears came to my eyes. “A naughty boy must have picked it,”I said to my brother. “It was I who picked the flower,”He replied in a low voice. I could hardly believe my ears. “Isn t there anything else better worth doing than picking the rose for fun?”I shouted at him. “But, but...”He chocked with sob.

I left my brother and went upstairs angrily. Through a window, I caught sight of a blind girl near my house holding a red rose and smelling it with a smile. I suddenly realized what had happened.

I rushed downstairs. Holding my brother s hands, I said, “I m sorry. I have wronged you.”“Never mind,”He said, “blind people also need beauty and love. We should do what we can to help them.”With the words, we went to the blind girl together.

全文句子结构变化较多,用词也较客观准确,对玫瑰花及种花人爱花的心情写得尤为出色。文章中某些语言上的问题值得提醒注意:

(1)去年11月(而今年11月还没有到)一般可说成 last November,而不说 in November last year。

(2)花芽、花蕾等长出来用 come out, 不用 come up。

(3)A naughty boy must have picked it 也可改为 It must be a naughty boy who have picked it. 的“It be+that”的强调式结构。

Bamboo

I began to like bamboo at the first sight of it, because I was deeply impressed by its lifeforce.

Last summer, I made a trip to the Muogan Mountains. Situated in Zhejiang Province, the Muogan Mountains is famous for bamboo. Because of this, the mountain is a tourist attraction in summer.

A vast amount of bamboo stands straight on the mountains. In the scorching summer, high bamboo plants with their slim leaves stand still, hiding the villas. However, towards the evening, they sway in the gentle evening breeze with their slender leaves brushing the roofs and walls of the houses. Their shade makes the temperature in the house much lower than that outside. People can do whatever they feel like doing in the cool house without sweating. This side effect of the bamboo creates an ideal place for people who dislike hot weather.

During my stay in Muogan, I paid a visit to a local“Bamboo Exhibition.”I was surprised when I entered the hall which was a world of bamboo products. The items on display, from shelters to utensils, were all made of bamboo. They displayed all species of bamboo that exist in the world. There was a bamboo house with bamboo chairs and tables, beautiful and comfortable. What struck me most was a pair of handmade bamboo lamps. One was a lifelike dragon and the other an uprising phoenix. Thousand of strips of bamboo no thicker than hair shaped the dragon and phoenix. During my visit, I came to know why people use bamboo in their life. It can withstand hardship and resist rotting.

I like bamboo most importantly because the high, straight plant represents a spirit of strong will, never losing heart. If it were ever weakminded, how could tender young bamboo shoots break the hard layers of earth and dirt?Whenever I meet with difficulties, I always think of bamboo which gives me courage and strength to overcome the difficulties.

文章首先从静态、动态两个方面对竹子外貌作了生动的描写,然后通过对竹子展览会的介绍,描述了竹子的多种用途,在最后一段中突出描写了竹子的性格。全文用词准确,且无重大语法错误。文章中某些语言上的问题值得提醒注意:

(1)at the first sight of sth. 有“第一眼看到某物(就怎么样)”的含义,故谓语加上 began 予以呼应。

(2)in the house 作后置定语修饰 the temperature, 而 more than 结构中要求比较的两者在语法成分上相一致,因此 outside 前要加上 that 以代替 the temperature, 这样一来 outside 也成了that 的后置定语,就能加以比较了。

(3)on display 是item 的后置定语。

A Night of Late Autumn

That night of late autumn was cool, I think. So I went out with an agitated heart and walked on the path.

It was misty on the autumn night. Everything before me became hazy. The hazy lights from the windows of the distant buildings looked like the eyes of sleepy men. The hazy pavilions lay there as if they were floating in the air. The hazy trees and grass made me feel that I was in a fairyland. The hazy autumn night was very beautiful.

Everything was hazy, except the moon hanging in the sky. She is a kind mother, I thought, giving bright light to the earth, and the child of the earth feels gently comfortable. The moon light was so bright that it turned everything silver, which made me feel that I was floating in the air.

Suddenly, a wild cat ran across the grassland by the roadside. It stopped to run round to look at me. Its body dissolved in the darkness, but its green eyes stared at me all the time. As I came nearer, it ran away quickly and disappeared into the darkness.

A couple by the roadside were whispering. On this quiet night, they were enjoying their romantic love. At that time, a piece of cloud came to cover the moon as if to give the young people a peaceful veil.

It was now deep into the night. On my way home, I found the street lamps pulling my shadow long. In the distance, there were faint sounds of singing.

On this night of autumn, I no longer felt agitated, and made my way home with a quiet mind.

这是一篇抒情式的描述文,写得很有感染力。作者紧紧抓住深秋之夜的薄雾朦胧的特征,写天写地写周围的景。最为出色的一笔是在描写寂静之中突然出现的那只野猫,这一笔使整个静态的画面顿时活了起来。此外,作者在描述秋夜的同时,还不时地夹进一些恰到好处的议论,为文章增色不少。文章中某些语言上的问题值得提醒注意:

(1)第一句作者想说秋夜令人凉爽,第二句又用 agitate, 因此,第二句开头 so 不应该用。

(2)give bright light 这一动作是说明 The moon is a kind mother 的,不能与前句并列成谓语,用非谓语动词较好。Autumn, My Favorite Season Of the four seasons in the year, I like autumn best. It s doubtless that there are many lovable things in the year round. Some people may appreciate the sprouts of spring, the thunderstorm of summer, or the snowflakes of winter. I, too, value these presents of the nature very much. Autumn, however is the soul of the year in my opinion.

Clearly, autumn is the season of foliage. There are leaves of so many colors that no painter has enough pigments to paint them, and that no author has enough words to describe them. This wonder can only be credited to the nature. I am always attracted by the beauty of the colorful leaves. Even a single leaf has a lot of hues. Is it green, brown, yellow, or red?I just cannot tell the definite colour. When held against the shining sun, the yellow leaf itself is shining like gold.

The high blue sky is another charm of autumn. It seems like a wise old man, calm and highspirited, and is always generous with pleasant sunshine and clear weather.

Those leaves and the blue sky, though arousing my love for autumn, are still not the dearest characteristics of the season. The leaves are fragile and will fall one day. And sometimes in other seasons, the sky may be clearer, in the summer after a shower, for example. But no other season is comparable to the autumn in terms of its“wisdom”. It benefits people with not only the harvest but also the magnificent scene. It really shows the intellect of the nature.

We human beings also have the spirit of the autumn. Have you ever seen old people doing morning exercises?In spite of their old age and fragile bodies, they are still active and industrious. They are to the society what beautiful leaves of the autumn to the nature. I am really moved by them. I really love autumn.

这是篇颇有抒情味的描述文,作者从秋天的叶子,写到秋天的天空,而后指出秋天最美的东西是其“成熟的智慧”,同时将人类与其相比,使文章有了一定的深度。从词语的选择和句型的运用还可以看出作者的英语语言基础不错,如:appreciate, hue, be credited to, They are to the society what beautiful leaves of the autumn to the nature等等。

The Best Picture in My Eyes

In my room, there is a picture entitled “Feeding the birds”on the wall. Though its painter is unknown to us, in my view it s the best picture I ve ever seen.

Though the picture is named“Feeding the birds”, we only see a woman sitting on a chair with three little girls seated opposite her. The girl in the middle is opening her mouth to a spoon of food the lady is giving. The other two girls are looking at the spoon. In the picture there is also a hen with some chicks walking around them. The whole picture makes people feel peaceful and tend to imagine.

Suppose the painter s purpose is to remind us of something that is worth remembering. Just like feeding birds, our parents give us not only food to eat, clothes to wear, but endless love as well. Bathed in their love, we grow up little by little. When we are in trouble, they always help us as much as possible though our willful temperament often hurts them. When we make progress in our studies, they always congratulate us happily as if they themselves succeeded. Parents love can t be expressed by words. We should do our best to repay it.

从一幅画联想到父母亲的爱,行文较为自然流畅,以图片的描写按位置顺序进行,突出重点 ,有条不紊。

A Starlit Night

Night has fallen. The moon hangs quietly in the sky. All the stars emit their soft and soothing light. Birds have gone back to their nests. There is a breeze blowing. The night is silent.

This beautiful scenery reminded me of the old days spent with my grandmother in a small town. On hot evenings, we would usually stay outdoors for a long time. I lay on the bamboo bed under the stars with a big fan in my hand, listening to my grandmother tell me all kinds of legendary stories. The most unforgettable one was about Niulang and Zhinü. It was a charming love story, though at that time I could not understand all this. I always raised my head, hoping to point out which was Star Niulang and which was Star Zhinü among the thousands, but I failed.

My grandmother died many years ago, but whenever I took at the sky, I will remember her.

本文作者从两方面入手,一方面描写夜景,另一方面通过描写在夜晚发生的事情,来表达自己对往事的追忆之情。文章描写细致、生动,很有感染力,让读者感受到一种平静祥和的生活气氛。

An Early Morning Walk in the Park

Last Sunday I woke up at 6:00 in the morning. I got up quickly and opened the window. It was a fine day. The sun had just risen, shining brilliantly. Everything seemed to be covered with a large piece of golden silk. Occasionally I could hear some birds singing in the trees. It was so fine. I decided to go for a walk in the park near my home. I walked all the way to the park.

When arriving at the park, I found there were so many people there. Some adults were doing morning exercises;some old people were doing Taijiquan;some were playing chess; some were talking about their birds cheerfully with the caged birds hung on some banches.

I walked around the park. To my delight, I found two classmates were talking with two foreigners in English in the northwest corner of the park. Then I joined them in talking. We had a free talk for half an hour, and then said“Goodbye”to one another.

On my way home, I thought walking in the park in the morning could make one happy and healthy.

文章第一段交待了时间、地点和人物,并描绘了窗外的晨景;第二、三段描绘了在公园里的所见所闻:有的在做早操,有的在打太极拳,有的在下棋,有的耍鸟、谈鸟,令“我”惊喜的是公园里有两位同学正在与两位外国人用英语谈话,“我”高兴地参与了他们的谈话;最后一段写出了“我”去公园散步的感受。总之,作者对公园这一特定场所中不同人物的不同活动、行为及“我”的心理进行了具体、生动的刻画。

文中句式富于变化。除了一些一般的简单句,作者多处用了现在分词短语作伴随状语,如第一段第四句The sun had just risen, shining brilliantly. 中的 shining brilliantly。该段最后一句I walked all the way to the park, breathing the fresh air, feeling very happy. 中的最后两个分词短语。作者在其他段落用了一些复合句式。这些多变的句式使文章读来清新自然,就如同清晨公园里所见美丽的景象一样,让人难以忘却。

文中第一段第五句Everything seemed to be covered with a large piece of golden silk. 用了修辞手法中的比喻格。在此意为:太阳初升,金光灿灿,万物就如同披上了一层金色丝纱一般,闪闪发亮。文中适当用一些修辞格,可增加语言的表达效果。

In the Examination Room

When I, as one of the monitors, got to the examination room the other day, all the examinees were already there. There were still ten minutes before we monitors gave them papers. I sensed that the atmosphere was frozen. It seemed that an important event would soon happen, and the future of the examinees would be determined at that very moment. Some sat there, looking worried;some looking confident;some looking tired and nervous with their eyes surrounded by two big black circles. From this glance, I could make out that they must have stayed up very late in preparing for today s examination.

Soon the bell broke the silence.

The examination papers were handed out to them. They quickly glanced over the questions and, at the same time, made their choice. Some sighed with great relief, some smiled, while some scratched their heads savagely. At my rate, most of them lost not a second to start working.

Soon, the room was drowned in the noise of scratching paper and of regular breathing.

The bell rang again and all papers were handed in. All the examinees streamed out of the room, busily exchanging their opinions and their results. Some talked loudly, wearing triumphant smiles on their faces while others made low voices, looking defeated.

作者按照时间的顺序先后描写了考前考场内的气氛、考生状态;发下试卷后考生的反应,考试过程中考场内的情况,交回试卷后考生的行为。文章描写的焦点在于考生的表情、行为,是喜还是忧,是紧张还是自信等,通过对此焦点的大肆渲染,作者写出考场这一特定场所的主要特点:考场是考生竞争的场所,考场如同战场。

文中两处用了比喻手法。第一段第三句中...the atmosphere was frozen。第四段中...the room was drowned in the noise...此两处暗喻修辞格(metaphor),运用恰当,突出了考场特有的紧张气氛。

文中三处用了对比法,即第一段中考前考生不同状态的对比,第三段试卷发下后考生不同反应的对照,最后一段对考生离开考场时不同行为的描绘。此三处的对比成功地刻画了同一考场内不同考生的不同心理活动。

Shanghai at Night

Shanghai is one of the most beautiful large cities in the world. It is also a beautiful seaport which attracts tourists from all parts of the world. Many people visit it during the day, but the scenery at night is wonderful.

When the moon rises, the gentle soft lights shine over the sea, stars twinkle all night, which look like the attendants of the beautiful queen——the moon. Many boats and ships go across the sea and leave silver lines behind them in the water that ripples along.

At night Shanghai is covered with so many electric lights that look like those decorated light in Christmas trees. And the lights are also reflected in the water. In the clear sky the bright moon seems like a big one. They are twinkling stars. The combined light makes Shanghai very beautiful.

Shanghai is a beautiful city in the day but even more wonderful at night.

本文生动、形象地描绘了一幅美丽的上海夜景图。第一段简单介绍了上海这座美丽的国际大都市。接着作者按时间顺序,分别描写了夜幕降临,华灯初上以及灯火辉煌、星光灿烂等不同时间、环境中上海迷人的夜景;文中作者并没有做泛泛的描述,而是对最具典型的夜景——月亮、星光、彩灯、繁忙的海上船只作了描绘。

本文通过对比、比喻等修辞手法,突出了中心内容,渲染了主要情节。第一段最后一句及最后一段分别对比说明上海的夜晚比白天更美丽;第三段第一句把上海的华灯比喻成圣诞树上的装饰灯,令人赏心悦目。描写文中修辞手法的贴切运用使语言形象、生动,中心突出,给读者留下深刻的印象。

My Mother

The person I love best in the world is my mother. Like many other Chinese women, my mother is diligent. She works in a supermarket. Because of her work, she often goes home very late at night.

Mother is very kind. At home, she treats my father kindly. She cares for me willingly. She treats my grandmother as if she were her own mother. So my grandma loves her. Besides, she gets along well with her neighbours and colleagues. When they have difficulties, she is always ready to lend them a helpful hand. Therefore she is loved and respected in our neighbourhood and in her shop.

Not only a qualified mother, but also a good tutor on my life s road is she. She always warns us:“Study while you study. Play while you play. Then you can be useful to society in the future.”What a good piece of advice it is!I ll keep it in my mind forever.

Such is my mother——ordinary but great!

本文作者运用直接描写法从三个方面对母亲进行了描写。首先写母亲的敬业精神,接着写她尊老爱幼,最后写母亲对“我”在人生道路上的引导。同时作者运用他人对所描写人物的看法间接衬托人物,从而使人物的形象更生动更丰满。

本文第三段第一句为倒装句,强调了 but also 后的 a good tutor on my life s road 这一部分。这也是该段的中心句,说明“我”母亲不仅像许多其他母亲一个是一位合格的母亲,而且“我”母亲又与众不同,她还是“我”人生道路上优秀的引路人。

Our Bedroom

Our bedroom is on the fifth floor of the Second Dormitory Building. It is a mediumsize room about six meters long and three meters wide. The walls are milk white and the ceiling is light yellow. Facing the south, it has a large window. Beneath it there is a painted radiator for heating the room in the winter time. At the right corner there is a blue door. Next to it stands a tall shelf on which we put our suitcases. Beside the shelf, there is a row of hooks for us to hang on our school bags and jackets. Against the walls stand the beds for four of us. Each bed is covered with brightcoloured bedsheet. In the middle of the room, there are four sets of chairs and desks. The desks are arranged in such a way that we can sit and write on them. We put our books and stationery on them. Above the desks there are two lights which make the room very bright at night. On the whole, it is a pleasant and comfortable room.

以上对寝室的描述犹如摄像机的镜头顺着房间的墙壁、天花板、窗子、门边的架子、墙边的床铺房中的桌椅和上部的电灯依次聚焦拍摄下来,令人读后一目了然。描述如此明细而有序与文中的十余个表位置与地点的过渡成分有关。它们代表文章各句的新的信息或阐述对象。文章的描述,即以这些代表新的信息或地点的过渡词依次出现而进行。

Busy Street in the Morning

If you live on the street, a busy scene appears before your eyes every morning when you happen to open your window.

You can see a lot of people rushing by, pupils to school, workers and cadres to work and housewives to markets.

In the street, the police are busy guiding the traffic. All kinds of traffic are travelling up and down on their own ways.

You can also hear sorts of noises, such as the school bells, shouting from people, and mothers calling their children etc.

Morning is the busiest time of the day.

作者很巧妙地将所见、所闻结合在一起,使视听结合的描写构成了一幅丰富多彩的生动画面。第二段中以一个rushing by引出了各类不同职业的人们为不同的目的而奔忙在同一个早晨的景象,避免了重复使用动词,使句子简洁。第三段中的接连的几种声音排列,将街道的繁忙嘈杂进一步具体化。最后一句点题,首尾呼应。

Autumn

Perhaps autumn is the most pleasant season of the year. The weather is neither too hot nor too cold. It is the best time for going on a trip.

Last Sunday we went to the countryside. There was golden wheat all over the fields. Large and colorful apples and pears were hanging on the trees. We could see some peasants were busy getting in the crops in the fields, and others were picking fruit under the trees. All the baskets were full of lovely fruit. It was also the fruit of the peasants labour. “No pains, no gains.”What a beautiful picture it was!It seemed as if we were wandering in a wonderful world!

I love autumn. I love the harvest time.

看了这篇英文游记,如同看到了一幅活生生的写生画。作者将客观描写与主观描述有机地结合起来,在对风景先远后近、先抽象后具体的客观描写后,再侧重一种氛围的人的情感描述。两者相互交融,主次分明,详略得当,使笔下的景色和人物组成了一幅引起读者共鸣的画面。

An Interesting Class

The bell for the composition class was ringing and all the students had taken seats, waiting for the teacher. Several minutes passed, but the teacher didn t appear. The boys and girls began to wonder what had happened to her. Some students began to talk, and some took out other books. Some even made a noise, which grew louder and louder.

About twenty minutes later, the door opened and Miss Li came in at last. No apology was made.

At this moment, Miss Li picked up a piece of chalk, wrote“Teacher is late.”on the blackboard and said that was the topic for the composition.

What an interesting composition class!

本文通过巧设悬念,描述了一堂有趣的作文课。文中伴随状语以及定语从句的运用体现了作者良好的语言素质。

An Unforgettable Poem Contest

To commemorate the 100th anniversary of the birth of Zhou Enlai, our school held an inspiring poem contest on March 5.

Before the contest, I was rather nervous. The ball was packed with people. But when I stood on the rostrum, I was too deeply moved to feel nervous. All the people there were filled with love and respect for the great leader.

I learned a lot from the contest. Premier Zhou always cared for the people and served the people heart and soul. As students, only by working hard, can we build our motherland into a powerful country?

这是一篇典型的三段式文章。第一段写“目的”,第二段写“竞赛过程”,第三段写“感想”,第二、第三段都是为了说明这次竞赛是鼓舞人心的这一主题。

I Were the Headmaster

I were the headmaster, just wait and see, I will turn our school into a beautiful garden.

At this moment, there are only a few flower beds. That s not enough. When summer comes, we feel so hot that we can t play any sport on the playground. So I am going to grow more flowers. Some of them will be put beneath the windows, others around the playground, even outside the school gate.

We have two playgrounds. One of them will be left for play. The other one will be used for rest. I will plant many trees around the ground, aprictos in the west, pear trees in the south, pomegrantate trees in the east, and persimmon trees in the north.

When spring is here, our school will be red and green all over. Look!The red apricot blossoms are out. The pear blossoms, small and white, clean and bright, cover the trees like snow. And the pomegranate blossoms are like balls of fire. In autumn, the persimmon trees will be green with leaves. When the students feel tired and need a rest after class, they can sit under the trees. How nice!

I will also set up all kinds of groups for students. For example, maths group, English group, art group, computer group, and so on. Our library will get more useful and helpful books.

I will set up two letter boxes. One is for suggestions. Two heads are better than one. I think it can help our school get better and better. The other one will be named“Yi Xiu Box”, used for answering difficult questions.

In addition, I will set an example of learning from the merits of other headmasters and teachers. I hope the students will have confidence in me, and really like the school.

本文作者描绘了一幅自己“执班”下的校园风景画,具体而生动,色彩缤纷,虽属于个人想像,但却极符合今天素质教育形势的要求。从文学的角度来看,需要注意的是,描写应掌握准确性。

How Should We Communicate

A few weeks ago, a great change happened to my family:my parents finally realized how lacking in technology we were and decided to install the Interent. My younger brother and sisters were overjoyed. The fact that a wealth of information was now available at the click of a mouse wasn t what excited them, though, it was the realization that along with the Internet came the bonus of having America Online s Instant Messenger.

Our lives have changed. Instead of reading books or playing outside, my brother and sisters are constantly glued to our computer, “chatting”with their friends and acquaintances. The other night, while I was doing research on the Web, my younger sister demanded that I let her use the computer, saying she had to“make plans ”. “Why not make a few phone calls?”

“But, Ali,”she said, “there are some people you don t just call.”

Situations like this annoy me. Why form relationships online?Don t a person s facial expressions, emotions and tone of voice make up a big part of his or her personality?When I see the TV commercial with the girl saying, “I love having Instant Messenger, it lets me be myself,”I wonder how someone can be herself while hiding behind a computer screen. When did teenagers become so shallow that they can t show their personalities in facetoface conversation?

I hope our overly technical society can return to the old forms of communication —talking in person or on the phone. While I still get the “You ve got to be kidding me”look from my brother and sisters when I say email instead of IM, I m glad that for me, the personal computer is not a place to form shallow relationships, but one of education and information.

当今社会,网络已经延伸到千家万户。对青少年来说,网上生活慢慢变成了现实生活的一部分。如何看待少年人在网上的交际,这是网络时代一个越来越引起重视的问题。本文的作者就从自己的妹妹身上看到了忧虑。

作者首先从家里决定安装因特网专线说起,这让他的弟弟妹妹们高兴极了。但是作者指出, 他们高兴的不是可以查资料了,而是为了可以利用美国在线及时通讯服务和在网上聊天交友。接着作者说到弟妹们整日沉湎上网交友,表示了自己对这种肤浅的交流方式的不满。他认为人们不能把个人电脑作为交往的工具,交往应该亲自参与或者用打电话的方式,电脑是获得教育和信息的工具。

在写这样议论性质的文章时,建议大家多举出例证来表明自己的观点,这样会更有说服力。在本文中,如果作者再能找出他所谓的肤浅交往的弊端来,就更能支持他的论点了。

Sun Shines Joy into Student s Life

Come wind,rain or shine—whatever the weather—there are crowds of students at school.Some hate school and think it is too boring(乏味的)to bear!But others love it.They realize school is an enjoyable place where they can find fun.

Ordinary things like sunrise and sunset may not have moved us for a long time.This is because we are becoming so foolish that we don t even take a little time to enjoy them.God gives us great presents,but most of us refuse them.No wonder so many people are unhappy.

The chance to be happy doesn t always exist,but sometimes it comes knocking on our doors.

Once,I made it my daily duty to open the door of my classroom.Some people think this is hard work,and it is.But I look at it in another way.

During the busy term,few get the chance to feel the sunrise.But I do.When I get to school in the morning,the moon and a few stars are still shining in the sky.A small number of lights are turned on and the school is silent.I like the atmosphere.After opening the door,I usually have to wait for some time before a second classmate enters the classroom.So,I wait outside on the balcony(阳台)and look far into the distance,waiting for the miracle(奇迹)—the sunrise.

I see the bottom of the sky turn bright and the new sun appear bit by bit until full sunlight spills across the land.I feel excited by the view,and a little sorry that my poor classmates miss such an exciting moment.

But they think schooldays are boring.

When school finishes it s usually already six o clock.Most of my classmates leave as quickly as possible,as if they will die if they stay a little longer.Someone s singing aloud,another s laughing,and someone else is eating in a hurry.

I don t follow them,sometimes I stay till there are only two or three students left.The noisy students finally disappear,I guess it must be a relief(解脱)for the school.

Once more,I stand on the balcony and look into the distance,waiting for another miracle—the sunset.I see the sun lose its shine and silently disappear behind the horizon.The campus regains its silence.The atmosphere is really wonderful.

Sunrise,sunset—some people don t value the simple pleasures in life.I am lucky to have the chance to enjoy them on schooldays.

当拥有变成了一种习惯,我们就忘记了珍惜。作者在平常的校园生活中产生了心的感悟:只要用心体会,一切都会变得有滋有味。本文语言生动,思路清晰,文笔流畅,富有哲理。

The Atmosphere of a Temple

The first time I stepped into the temple,my brain suddenly became blank at the mysterious atmosphere,Quietness overwhelmed the big hollow hall as if the spirit was burning.A column of light smoke was continuously rising from a big copper jar.Some reverent pilgrims were kneeling before the statues which represented the spirit,whispering their wishes or quietly asking for help.Beside the copper jar,there was a little monk,continuously tapping a sculptured wooden head with a short stick.

The atmosphere was so solemn and so mysterious that I forgot all that I had prepared to do.

这篇短文描写了香火缭绕的庙宇的神秘而宁静的气氛。作者善于将自己的感受和通过细致观察得来的印象结合起来描述,衔接自然,天衣无缝。例如,开头写庙中那神秘的气氛,接着抒发自己的感受:脑海一片空白;结尾写由于这种气氛是如此之肃穆庄严、神秘宁静,以致于作者发出这样的感慨:忘了来此之目的!

文章作者对生活观察细致,用笔洗练。文章短小精致,开门见山,步步深入,让人有身临其境的感觉。

文中遣词造句贴切、精练,例如:my brain suddenly became blank at;quietness overwhelmed the big hollow hall as if;the atmosphere was so...that I forgot,etc.

Beauty

Helen Keller once said,“The best and the most beautiful things in life cannot be seen or even touched, they must be felt with the heart.”

Often,even for those of us who are sighted,beauty is elusive and hard to defined.For me,beauty is what I always seek to experience and understand.Every day,everywhere I go,wherever my eyes light,there I see beauty in China,often in traditional forms,but even more often in modern ones.

As I go about my daily life,I see rows of trees lining the streets,I see the indescribable beauty of the rough dark branches of them,outlined(etched) against the deep green of their abundant leaves.Beautiful,you say.And I agree.As I walk through the city on my way to school,I look up at yet another skyscraper under construction,wrapped in a cocoon of bamboo poles.Glass and bamboo,artificial and natural,old and new.Beauty!

When I go to the park,I am almost overcome with the beauty that surrounds me.There are the traditional forms of happy families flying blue,red and yellow kites,and the softer glory of a dragonfly hovering over the lake.

At the temple I am again overwhelmed.I step inside and relax into the calming quiet.I breathe in the sweet fragrance of incense,and walk forward into a mist of smoke,a world beyond and within the everyday.I walk on further.In the distance,I behold colorful ads and steaming cars,with jazz faintly heard.

Before me,a map of China carved into the mountainside.A map of China carved into the wrinkles of grandmother s cheek as she lovingly cuddles granddaughter,whose own smooth cheek will soon be scuplted into the face of China s future.

Calligraphy and Kodak.Bicycles and Beamers.Glue pots and computers.China.Beauty!

本文通过对美的理解,引发人们走进生活,体验生活,感悟生活之美。文章文笔流畅优美,结构紧凑,上下文连贯,语言得体深刻。虽无许多华丽的词藻,却意外多了分清静感、真实感,使人们仿佛身临其境。

The Beauty of My Hometown

I am strongly gifted with the rural feeling.I love the beauties of nature.For some time I lived in a cottage,which faces a lawn that extends like a huge carpet of vivid green.

Behind the cottage slim bamboo is swaying in the breeze,and before the cottage lies a fine and soft lawn with colorful wild flowers and quiet pools dotted about.In the pools fish are roaming about freely.Woodbine crawls over the walls,hanging its blossoms about.Around the cottage holly is providently planted,to cheat winter of its dullness,and to throw an appearance of green summer to cheer the cold house.

Looking out of the window,I can see clumps of tall trees here and there,heaping up piles of rich green leaves in the air,the magnificence of groves,and woodland glades,with deer trooping in silent herds across them,hares bounding away to coverts,or pheasant birds suddenly bursting open their wings,a crystal stream winding its way into a glassy lake,reflecting the trembling trees,with yellow leaves sleeping in the midst,and at whiles I catch sight of an old temple or some still statues,grown green and damp with age,giving an air of classic holiness to retirement.

If ever love,as poets sing,delights to visit a cottage,it must be my cottage.

这是一篇写景佳作。文章作者笔法细腻,文字绚丽,通达畅晓,委婉感人。

文章共分三个层次。第一层次抒发作者对大自然深深的热爱、眷恋之情,并提到曾小住乡村。第二层描绘村舍周围的自然风光,内容上富有诗的意蕴,形式上也不乏诗的韵律。其清新、柔美、壮丽、古朴典雅、多姿多彩、动中有静、静中有动,尽现读者眼前。景色由近及远写来,字里行间透着情感,似乎听得到那淙淙水声,闻得到那清幽花香,看得到那悠然水中鱼,其情其景,让人回味再三。第三层,即最后一句,是一句诗,放在文章末尾起到了深化主题的作用。试问这么美的地方,爱神怎能不眷顾!

文中用了很多非谓语动词形式,例如第二段第三段中,达到了简洁、生动的效果。第三段使用了大量的排比手法,增强了文章的气势。文中拟人的写法随处可见,如cheat winter of;winding its way;trembling trees;leaves sleeping;love...delights to visit...,etc.

Weekend Life in the USA

In the USA Monday is the beginning of the workweek.It is the day most Americans like least.It is not surprising then that the day they like most is Saturday.Saturday is the end of the workweek.It is the beginning of the weekend.

Life is different on the weekend in the USA.Most Americans take care of their houses,cars or gardens.They sleep late in the morning.They enjoy the feeling that the time seems to move more slowly.The week is for things you have to do.The weekend is for things you want to do.Some people may get in a car and go for a drive in the country.In a town in Indiana there is a Saturday night custom called“cruising”.Cruising means to spend the evening driving your car slowly up and down the town s main street.People have a cruising talk from car to car.They exchange greetings,jokes and friendly insults.Cruising is the most popular in small towns where there is not much else to do.They like to take part in a sports activity outdoors.And on Saturday night they might go to a public eating place or a cinema.

Anything and everything can happen on Saturday night.People go dancing;they visit friends and parties.They drink too much.They sleep,watch TV,and so on.

Many people spend the Saturday night at home with friends.They have dinner together.Maybe they watch a movie on a video cassette rocorder.Half the Americans would be glad to trade a paid workday for an extra day of free time.The only thing wrong with the weekend,the Americans think,is that it does not last longer.

本文描写了美国人度周末的方式。着墨很多的是对有些小城,比如印第安那州某小城度周末的特殊方式的描述。周六傍晚开着车在大街上“散步”,驾车人互致问候、谈笑,甚至互相友好的辱骂,令人印象十分深刻,和其他地方度周末的方式是何等的不同!

文中用了较多对比句,例如:Monday is the beginning of the workweek.Saturday is the beginning of the weekend.The week is for things you have to do.The weekend is for things you want to do.行文流畅,繁简得当。描述美国人度周末的方式时,突出了其独特之处,语言简练,琅琅上口。文章结尾表现了美国式的幽默。

Success with Foreign Guest

The other day,my father told me that one of his foreign friends,who comes from Scotland(苏格兰),was coming to visit us.I became nervous at once.Should I talk to him in English?

“He can t speak Chinese,”said my father.“So it s a good chance for you to practise your spoken English.”

“What?”I was excited,but at the same time worried.Excited,because it was a great chance to improve my English and an unforgettable experience.Worried,because I had never talked to a foreigner before.

My English was very poor.When I talked to other people in English,I got nervous about my grammar and could not speak fluently(流利地).The worst thing was that when I spoke,I felt everybody was looking at me.And if I made many mistakes,I thought I would be laughed at.I really lacked the confidence to speak English.

Well,the foreigner,Derec,finally arrived.He was friendly and polite,just like an English gentleman who lived in the 19th century.But,friendly as he was,I was still very nervous.

I can t remember what we talked about.But I remember that whatever he asked me,I could only answer yes or no.I was so embarrassed(尴尬的).

But Derec was very nice.He tried to speak slowly and use simple words to make me understand.Little by little,I began to relax and make sentences.I forgot to worry about my grammar and everything else.I just said what I was thinking.And I felt so happy because the gentleman understood me and nodded with a smile.I bet there were lots of mistakes in my sentences,but I didn t care any more.

So,when you talk to a foreigner,just speak out.As for things like grammar,please throw them away.The only thing that matters is that you believe your English is the best.

作者笔法流畅,语言简练,用真情实感,告诉我们开口说英语的“秘密”,能对学生起到很好的交流、教育作用。

Sea Gulls

When you are travelling by ship in a sea,you can often see sea gulls rise and fall.Sometimes the silence of the sea is broken by the loud call of a sea gull.The other sea gulls follow its call.This often happens when they are fighting to get some delicious food.

Along the shore,sea gulls are helpful to the cleaners who clean the beaches.The sea gulls gulp down potato chips and scraps of bread.And because they like insects,they clean away lots of crawly things.Sea gulls also help clean harbors.They fly slowly in the air over the water and swoop down to pick up some floating things,such as popcorn,vegetables,or dead fish.

In fact,sea gulls are not cleaning up.They re only finding something to eat.They eat all day as long as food can be found.They eat so much just to stay alive because they fly great distance almost every day.

Sea gulls can fly many miles without stopping.They can fly from one country to another with a short rest here and there.

They sweep and swoop like paper airplanes.When they glide,they seem to be sliding down invisible slides up in the air.Others float in great circles with their wings spreading wide.Some just seem to be sitting in the air,almost unmoving,like a kite on a still day.

Sea gulls are good at swimming,too.The skin between their toes makes them have webbed feet like ducks.

Sea gulls stay on the surface of the water sometimes.It s because they want to have a rest after long trips.

本文作者从四个方面描画出海鸥的可爱:给过于宁静的大海带来生机;是不可缺少的大海的环境卫士;有勤劳勇敢不畏险阻的性情;美丽的飞翔姿态给人们带来美的享受。

本文从视觉描写到听觉描写又到视觉描写,给读者描绘出一幅生机勃勃的海上美景。有客观性描写,也有印象性描写,二者结合得天衣无缝。写到海鸥的飞行姿态时,用了很多非常形象的比喻,如:sweep and swoop like paper airpplanes;seem to be sliding down invisible slides up in the air;seem to be sitting in the air,... like a kite on a still day。

本文过渡自然、用词传神考究、笔触细腻,特别是在衔接上处理得很好。用词传神考究表现在光一个“飞”字就用了不下八种表达方式:rise,fall,swoop,sweep,glide,slide,float,sit。

My Favorite Song

The song I enjoy the most is Yesterday Once More.It is an old song.But for me,there are no other songs that can match it.

Each time I listen to it,I imagine a wonderful scene in my mind:A pretty girl was listening to the radio when she was young,with a smile on her face.As time passes by,she is no longer young.She sits down again before the radio,which once brought her happiness,recalling those happy times she had.

When I am tired of doing homework,I like to put on my earphones and preses the“play”button of the recorder.Then the nice melody comes to my ears again:“When I was young,I d listened to the radio,waiting for my favorite songs...”A sort of feeling comes to my mind,and I think that I should cherish today s happiness of being young.

We all know that yesterday can never come again.However,music can often bring the nicest memories into our hearts.I believe that I will always love this song,until I m old.When I m old,I ll listen to this song and recall the pleasant imagines of a boy listening to his favorite songs many years ago.It will be just like yesterday coming back once more.

Recalling something is a special experience.Sometimes it is very nice,while sometimes it makes you very sad.We all wish to come back to those good times,but it is impossible.All we can do is to keep them carefully in the book of life,just like beautiful bookmarks.

一首经典老歌《昨日重现》让作者对生活有了感悟,认识到回忆过去的同时要珍惜现在的时光。文笔清新,富有韵味,哲理深刻,让人读来回味无穷。

When Will It Stop

After The World Trade Center were destroyed by terrorist attack on September 11th,2001,the USA began to object to the terrorist activities.In the past years,the USA and Afghanistan and Iraq have broken out two wars.And the one with Iraq was even more ruinous.It appears to us that what the USA have done is just for human s peace.But in actual fact,it just asks for it s own benefit under the words that they were against the terrorist activities.And I think the USA and England have a war with Iraq just on the purpose that they demand more oil.As a result,Japan also send its army to Iraq now,for the same reason.But they only said that they are against the terrorist activities.The more they are against it,the more terrorist activities the world suffers.They are destroying the world s peace.Therefore,when should the action against terrorist activities stop?I m looking forward to this day,which is wished to come as early as possible.

作者大胆地议论国际局势并且提出自己的见解,不能不说是个有思想有胆识的中学生。文章内容完整,条理清晰,观点明确,说明作者驾驭语言的能力较强。考虑问题的角度也值得我们借鉴。对主题论证中肯,分析到位,是一篇优秀的议论文。

Happiness Is for Everyone

I always hear people say:“Oh,I m bad luck.Look at Mr Zhang—he is a millionaire.Look at Mrs Li—her husband is a manager.Then look at me—what am I?”

If you are like these people,please listen to this story.

Three middle school classmates—Mr Zhang,Mrs Li and Mr Wu,meet after ten years.They talk about their lives.

Mr Zhang is a big company manager.He always eats out at expensive restaurant with other business people.He is used to delicious food.But he misses the simple things,like rice and dumplings.

Mrs Li buys a car,but she has little spare time to feel the rain.

Mr Wu owns a big house the size of a palace.But now he wants to live in the countryside.

So,don t envy other people because happiness is always nearby.

When you fall down in physical education class,your friends will help you up.When you study hard for a test and sweat(流汗),your parents will be behind you giving you a breeze(凉风).When you get good scores,your friends will greet you.When you do the wrong thing,your teacher will correct and help you.You cannot say you are bad luck.

Instead,life is like a revolving door,when it closes,it also opens.So long as you take every chance you get,you can be a happy and lucky person.

这是一篇哲理小品文。论点明晰,逻辑清楚,耐人寻味。语言流畅,详略得当。文中不仅弥漫着幸福的香甜,而且浸透着激情的光芒。这是文章成功之处,点透了读者的心,值得同学们学习欣赏。

Something to Look Forward to

Little Children look forward to the arrival of Spring Festival,grownups to that of planting rice.As a child,I couldn t understand what the elders hoped for.But Spring Festival was really fascinating,for it meant the richest food as well as a lot of fun.As soon as the festival was over,I dreamed another one and wished time flew as fast as possible.

Days spent in expectation come and go very fast.Very soon I finished primary school and went to junior and senior middle school.With even more desire for many more things:for graduation with honours,for a good job,for a successful career,for a happy family...Climbing the upward steps of hope,I had become a fully grown man before I was aware of it,a busy breadwinner with a family on my hands.

A day without hope would be unimaginablely pale.There must be something to look forward to each day to brighten one s life and keep it out of shadows.To a person cherishing hopes every morning rises a new sun.Even if it is a fantasy or an illusion,as long as it shows a ray of hope,it still urges you on in pursuit of that little sparkle without letting up.

Deprived of moisture content,soil turns into desert.Deprived of hope,what is there left to a person?A small hope sustains a person for a day,a great one for a life time.Human beings cannot do without something to look forward to.

作者在文中说了儿时的期盼,随着年龄的增大,盼的内容也随之丰富多彩,在文章结尾揭示了一个生活哲理:没有盼头的生活无色无味,黯淡无光,有盼头的生活,才充满阳光,才具有生命活力。作者抒发了对美好生活的向往和追求的强烈愿望。文章观点正确,也反映出作者奋发向上的积极态度和乐观性格,具有感染力。文章紧扣主题,真正体现了散文的特点:形散而神不散,确属佳作。

Beijing in My Eyes

When I was a small child I once came to Beijing.But at that time I was very young and I only stayed there for a short time,so that trip only made me curious about this city.As time goes by,I really hope to take a good look at this city.Fortunately,this summer I had the opportunity to go to Beijing again.I stayed in Beijing for two weeks.Great changes have taken place there.

Beijing in my eyes is becoming more and more beautiful.When you walk along the street,you will see lots of flowers and trees.The air is fresh,the sun is shining and all are fine and nice.

Beijing in my eyes is becoming more and more modern.The traffic is busy but in good order.A lot of magnificent buildings have been put up.There is so much modern equipment in the office.Because of that,people work much more efficiently that before.

Beijing in my eyes is becoming much richer.People are well dressed and there are so many beautiful cars running in the streets,and lots of drivers are women!In the department stores and supermarkets,there are so many colorful goods.People rush here and there to buy them.

Beijing in my eyes is becoming more and more energetic.People work in a high spirit from day to night and this gives this city more energy.It is a city that seems to have no night.Old people in this city are especially active.They get up early,and do morning exercises,enjoying a happy and healthy life.

I hope I will have another chance to come here again and see more changes of Beijing with my own eyes.

I love Beijing.I hope it will be getting more beautiful and modern.

I love Beijing.I hope it will be getting richer and more energetic.

I love Beijing.I hope it will become the more prosperous city in the world!

“借景抒情,寓情于景”是这篇文章的写作特色。作者通过自己亲眼目睹的变化,将北京城描写得格外美丽,同时抒发了自己热爱北京的深厚感情。作者使用抒情排比句式,读起来朗朗上口,耐人寻味。最后的一系列排比把激情推向了高潮,这种写法是抒情散文中抒发情感的较好表达方式,也能很自然地引起读者的共鸣。这篇文章在构思、立意和遣词造句上都有许多可取之处。

描写文(Deion)是通过我们的五官感觉去描述周围的事物,作者通过自己的感受,用生动形象的语言,对人物、自然景物、社会环境和动植物等进行具体、生动、形象的描述。它是用富有表现力的文字描绘客观事物的一种表现形式。写人则栩栩如生、历历在目;写景则如临其境,如睹其物;写物则绘声绘色,神形兼备。

所有描写都包含两个要素:一是对象(object), 二是观察者(observer)。描写文可以分为客观描写(objective deion)和主观描写(subjective deion)两种。客观描写有时称physical deion或scientific deion。就是指对所要描写的对象外貌客观地记录下来。这种描写要以准确、清楚为原则。客观性描写文作者很像是科学家,他要从自己的工作中严格地排除个人意见和感情。主观描写又称imaginative deion或impressionistic deion。这种描写不重外在细节的准确,而是通过观察者对周围事物的感悟和想象,激发读者的感情,让人们去感觉,而不是让人们去看。作者要想使自己的描写成功,不仅感觉要深,而且要在自己的心目中明确那是什么感情。只有作者了解了自己的心情才能把它交流给读者。

人们通常所说的描写,主要是指艺术性描写。我们这里所说的描写也包括了一部分用于说明文里的技术性描写,如地区的介绍等。描写,有单独成文,也有穿插在其他体裁之中的。比如,在记叙文中,景物描写可以创造某种气氛、烘托人物性格、展示事件背景等。

描写文写法大致可归纳如下三点:

描写人物,从人物的面貌、性格、行为等特点入手刻画一个栩栩如生的人物形象;描写事物,侧重描写其外观、颜色、形状以及作者对事物的印象、态度等;描写景象,从不同的角度描绘对同一景象的不同感受,并注入自己的情感,通过生动的语言把自己的感受传达给读者。

描写文的特点是用语言描绘一幅人物、事物或景色等的图画,无论是客观性还是主观性描述常常有感情色彩,只是客观性的描述文所含有的情感因素相对少一些。

无论是描写人物、事物、景色,还是别的现象,最好不要面面俱到,也不要作泛泛描述,应该选择典型情节和特征进行重点描写。

在描写文的写作过程中要注意以下几点:

(1)要考虑好选择描写的角度和次序。角度,就是我们通常所讲的人称,用第一和第三人称都可以,但目的、内容和效果却不同。描写次序是指先写什么后写什么的问题。一般来讲,英语描写短文总是按空间顺序(spatial order)来安排次序的。比如要描写一个房间时,要从先看到的部位写起,从上到下或从下到上,从左到右或从外到内等。

(2)要选择好重点部位或内容来写。对人物、事物、心理和景色的描写要突出重点,应抓住最富于感染力的情节和特征来写。

(3)要把描写和叙述结合起来写。好的描写总是把记事、写人、状物、写景紧密地糅合在一起,使其浑然一体,既突出重点,又有点有面、点面结合,创造出一种和谐的美,让客观事物在自己的笔下描绘得更生动,更逼真。

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